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Revolution

Revolution
Against the British
American evolution
A national wish

Against the British
We stand tall
A national wish
Though many fall

We stand tall
Through the fire
Though many fall
Freedom we desire

Through the fire
In our strife
Freedom we desire
A new life

In our strife
American evolution
A new life
Revolution
This was an assignment for my Creative Writing: Poetry class at school. We had to write a Pantoum, which I think our teacher said is a French form of poetry. I was strapped for ideas, so after lunch, this popped into my head. It's about the American Revolution.

My friend, :iconbe4urgone4everon:, says I sound really old for writing this since it's in Present-tense instead of Past-tense.

I feel bad for writing this since I'm a Hetalia fan, though D:

What do you think?

~Kiwi
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LuckyHetaliaFangirl Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
I made an AMV!!!
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xPlushThingsx Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
Interesting format. I'm glad you used the 'American Evolution' line twice, its too good not to use more than once.
Just to ask though, what about the loyalists? I get the feeling from 'A National Wish' that everyone wanted this to happen.

...Thats all~ XD
My school is just starting a poetry unit, maybe we'll learn about that format...
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MamaKiwi Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
lol my school doesn't teach about the Revolutionary War D: It upsets me D:

Pantoum is actually a French form of poetry, well, that's what Mrs. Kooi says anyway... She says that in French poetry, there's a LOT of repetition. This was 20 lines, but we only had to come up with ten BECAUSE of the repetition :D
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xPlushThingsx Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
We're learning about it now... We were going to pretend to Tar and Feather tax collectors...but we didnt have the materials. D:

Oh nice... It is cool, took a sec to find the pattern. XD
Not to torture you..but I'd love to see it as 20 lines~
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MamaKiwi Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It is twenty lines- that was the assignment XD Doesn't look like it, does it? lol
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xPlushThingsx Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
...Oh crap. XD
Whoops >//>
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MamaKiwi Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
XD
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